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Re: 6000!
I feel astonishingly inferior! That's right, astonishingly!
Jun 8, 2007 -
Re: Goodnight...
Can opener! Random :D It serves us well. *pats it*
Jun 6, 2007 -
Re: Worship
Ohh, it's HIM! Wondered what he looked like.
Jun 6, 2007 -
Re: Pirates of the Carribean 3
I liked it, Johnny Depp is awesome, but I found it hard to follow. I spent most of my time going "eh?" Loved the scene after the credits, though. Lovely ...
Jun 4, 2007 -
Re: National Towel Day
This remind anyone else of Towlie from South Park?
Jun 4, 2007 -
Re: Desert Rain
I liked the imagery in this poem, you described it well and I really felt like I was there. Forgive me for not being very helpful but I haven't critiqued ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: [Deleted]
Loved it, it caught my attention immediately. Everyone else has gone through the grammar issues etc, all I'll say is that I didn't want it to end, so my suggestion ...
May 24, 2007 - Re: My Unicorn May 24, 2007
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Re: Congrats to Snoink!
Thought you were congratulating Snoink on her baby :P Well done, anyway :)
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Rain
It is rather vague, in some places I'm not really sure what you're talking about. Also I didn't like "wanna", might sound better if you change it to "want to"? ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Of Pigments And Protons
Sorry I have little useful to say, but I really like this, your imagery is excellent. Nothing strikes me as needing to be changed. I look forward to reading more ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: psychoneurosis
I found it hard to follow, but I really liked it simply based on your imagery, and I think I have a vague idea of what it's about. I think ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Chasing Rainbows Chapter 3
Good description, I can see what's going on really well, however the grammar mistakse throw me off a little, so that's something to work on-the kind of stuff that Magyk ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Inspirations
I see what you're trying to say, but it seems you're having trouble expressing it while making your poem flow. At the moment that majority of it is just a ...
May 24, 2007 -
Re: Cutting
I agree with Whence, the capitals threw me off, and your writing should be able to speak for itself without them - show me you're shouting through description, not capitals. ...
May 24, 2007
